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Homepage › Stories › The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome › Chapter 63

The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome

Why are you here?

*Andy's POV*

I sank a little into Gwyn's grey couch and tried not to fidget. Fuckfuckfuck! I wasn't sure if she had accepted my apology or not. I didn't really have any grand plan, I just wanted to spend more time with her. I figured that'd be what I would tell her.

I hadn't meant to try and kiss her just then, I had just, I dunno… It had just happened when I saw her smile, as she looked down at the roses in her arms, I had impulsively ran my fingers through her soft, fine hair. With her black hair and pale skin, she was like a chubby, biker Snow White or something. I chuckled.

Gwyn walked over and grabbed… a pack of cigarettes (?!) out of a jacket pocket and motioned for me to follow her. I followed her out to a small balcony, where we sat on some green, plastic lawn furniture. There was a matching, small table with a glass ashtray, full of cigarette butts. I watched her pull one and lighter out of a yellow pack, and light it. She didn't look at me.

Guilt washed over me, starting at the pit of my stomach, and coming in sharp waves. I felt nauseated. I felt defeated, I couldn't even sit up straight. I lit my own cigarette and took a long drag before asking, "Gwyn, why are you smoking?"

She paused. "Andy... It's not your fault. Look, I haven't had a chance to really make it clear yet that everything that went wrong was because of me. Um..." She looked conflicted and was clearly struggling. "Look, before I go on and possibly, just, embarrass myself, can you tell me, I mean, why are you here? What are you looking for?"

I leaned forward, I knew the answer to that question. "Gwyn, I want to spend the rest of today and tonight with you. I want to spend tomorrow morning with you, and then I want you to give me a lift to our next show in Tacoma, and stay for it. Please."

Notes

QOTD: since Gwyn is a veterinarian- do any of you have any pets? do you have a favorite type of pet?

i have an elderly sugar glider, 20 leopard geckos (youngest is 9, oldest is 13), and a hermit crab (i've had for ~9 years). :O)



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SmuttyPariah SmuttyPariah
4/15/17

Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.

anathema anathema
1/26/17

@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.

anathema anathema
1/26/17
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