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Homepage › Stories › The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome › Chapter 64

The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome

I won't change my mind

*Gwyn's POV*

So Andy wanted to spend time with me!?! Maybe he felt it too? That crazy, electric zing that I didn't think was just sex-type chemistry. It felt like something… interesting? Comfortable? Funny?

"Gwyn?" Huh? Oh, right; he had basically just asked if he could stay the night, and I had spaced out. I realized I was grinning. He had a cautious, questioning, little smile too.

I pointed my cigarette at him. "Yeah, Andy, that sounds cool. I mean, I'd love that…” My insecurities ate away at me. “But seriously, if you’re interested in spending that kind of time with me, I kind of need to bring up some stuff about me you should know. It’s cool if you change your mind, like, at any time."

I was scared. I knew I was, more or less, severely damaged, inferior goods. If Andy didn't reject me now, he would soon, they all had. But I was totally unable to stop myself from giving in and trying again, even knowing what would surely happen eventually.

Andy narrowed his eyes at me, putting out his cigarette, and sat silently for a moment. "Gwyn?" He waited until I looked up from the floor, "I won't change my mind."


Andy rose and moved towards me with intention, taking the cigarette from my hand and flinging it from the balcony. He got me to stand by goosing my ass, making me squeal. That just got him chuckling, his blue eyes sparkling. He wrapped an arm tightly around my waist and brought me to him, holding me firmly.


Andy was a pretty tall guy. His body was slender, hard, and warm; I could feel each breath he took as his chest rose and fell. I was having trouble thinking as I looked up into his eyes.

"I know what I want, Gwyn. So, um, the question is, do you want me?" He licked his lips, flicking his lip ring to the side, as he looked down at me, waiting for a reply.

Notes

QOTD:

part A) dracula or frankenstein?

part B) clive barker or stephen king?

part C) bram stoker's dracula (the movie) or interview with the vampire (the movie)

part D) leatherface or freddy krueger?



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SmuttyPariah SmuttyPariah
4/15/17

Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.

anathema anathema
1/26/17

@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.

anathema anathema
1/26/17
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