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The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome - Comments
Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.
@Merelan
oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.
@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.
@Merelan
oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.
To answer your qotd part 2, Chapter 136: I'm on my 5th re-read of LoJ. It's my go to when outlining and scribbling stuff for my Jinxx fanfic is driving me beyond nuts. :)
@Merelan
it's three syllables, but the first one sort of rhymes with vague. more so with bag, though. hag-ih-men :O)
Ok, on my like, 4th re-read now, and I just realized something. I've been reading 'Hageman' as 'Hage-man', the first syllable rhyming with 'vague'. Am I right? If not, what is the correct pronunciation? Enquiring minds want to know!
:)
Just giving this a re-read to sate my thirst for all things Lord Andy and Gywn, and to answer the question in Chapter 91, 43/single/heterosexual/white/taxi dispatcher-dreamer-of-Jinxx/female.
I'm rereading them again, definitely to my liking! I just identify with Gywn more. I'll shut up now and let you get back to work :)
@anathema
I thought you had become inactive, but for the love of Gywn, I thought I'd ask... The things we do for stories.... Lmao
@Merelan
oh, i think about her and (that) Andy all the time. i have a plot outlined and everything, complete with animated/undead friends in tow!
when i upload the sequel, barring something strange, it would likely be here as well as wattpad. ;O) so glad to get your comment, i only get comments/etc. on this story every 6-8 months these days.
Oh heavens yes, I'd love to read more! Gywn and Andy just captured my heart, like no other story I've read yet! I'm dying to know how everything goes once she gets to the bus! For the record: I hate wattpad. This site is so much easier to navigate. But I will soldier on, whichever place you upload the sequel!
ETA: I read your other stories, and I enjoyed both. But I just have to know about Gywn, when you can get back to her - can't you just see her, tapping her foot in the corner of your mind, waiting to get back to her Lord Andy Biersack?
@Merelan
no, i haven't started it yet. are you still interested?
when i do get around to it, i'll post a new chapter with the link, how's that? if you're subscribed, you should get a notification.
i've just been so involved with working on my other stories (Succubus and Night Watch), it's taken up a lot of my time. I want to wait until at least Succubus is finished before tackling the LOJ sequel.
i'm also in the middle of editing LOJ. especially at the beginning, the original version had a plethora of severe grammatical mistakes, and it bothered me so much, i felt like i had to fix it. this site stopped letting me edit chapters, so the final version is slowly going up on wattpad. maybe once i'm finished, i can work on a sequel? it's just that it would be very research intensive, and i've got so much still going on. but i definitely haven't forgotten or given up. maybe in the mean time check out my other stuff? :O)
4/15/17