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I Will Love You Forever

The Concert

I was at a Black Veil Brides concert and In The End was being played. All I heard was Andy's angelic voice singing In The End. I loved everything about him. His voice, his hair, his eyes, his smile, his scream, his tattoos, his Batman shirts, his everything. But he didn't know I existed... I looked up from head banging and he was staring at me. Well, that was what I thought until I looked over and saw a really pretty girl standing next to me. I had a backstage pass so I'd just ask him which one of us he was staring at. I decided not to wait and I pointed to me and tilted my head like a confused lab. He winked, smiled, and nodded. I blushed and he laughed. He then said in his low, attractive voice, "Today I have someone you want to meet." He summoned me with his hand and I walked up to the stage. I got to the stop stair and he picked me up bride style and carried me to the microphone. He stood me up and said, "Would you like to introduce yourself to the crowd?" I said, "Hello my name is Lexi and I have absolutely no idea why I'm on this stage with my heros right now..." Andy, Ashley, CC, Jake, and Jinxx all chuckled. I blushed and laughed along with them. "Are you ready to find out Lexi?"

Notes

This is my first fanfic ever so yeah.... Constructive criticism is highly valued. So are ideas. Just keep in mind it's PG-13...

Comments

@Purdy_Girl_1
I will but going to add more suspension and I won't rush everything.

bvbarmyforlife bvbarmyforlife
4/26/15

Please make another one like this

Purdy_Girl_1 Purdy_Girl_1
4/11/15

@BVBfangirlqueen
Thank you! I thought everything was moving a little fast too. I will try to improve that in my next story. XD

bvbarmyforlife bvbarmyforlife
4/10/15

A little more description and suspense would be nice too. And maybe some more dramatic wording? :) Just suggestions. This is a really good idea and I like how it cautions people about internet-dating being dangerous.

BVBfangirlqueen BVBfangirlqueen
4/10/15

I don't want to make this criticism I just want to add some 'constructive' with this comment because you have a really good idea here. My only problem with it was that it was a little... naive... for lack of a better word. The dialect and some of the actions were too fast and a little too fluffy to be realistic. I think you just need to get the swing of things ad you'll be a top-notch writer. :)

BVBfangirlqueen BVBfangirlqueen
4/10/15