The Model - Comments

Aww, AB is jealous!

Oh, wow! Thanks so much! <3 I usually read my stories over a couple of times so I can find any mistakes :) But you're right. There is some weird shit on here... Some people don't even have punctation... like... at all... Oh and *fistbump back*

@shadowsdied

Your English is generally fantastic. English is a really messed-up language; you should be proud. Your mastery of it exceeds many of the native speakers on this site by far.

@smutty pariah

oops, sometimes I accidentally use German spelling, lol. But thanks for reminding me :)

I don't share how I got into the band. It's a crazy story. ;3

Suffice to say I'm a big fan now.

I like your descriptive narrative. Though, on a side note, the drug is spelled 'ecstasy.' ;3

You will find out in the next chapter I will publish in an hour or so hehe :D

Aww, goodness! You're a sweetie! But now I'm wondering what exactly is going on!

@smutty pariah
It doeeees

The plot thickens!

@smutty pariah

Thanks so much :) And yes, youre right. I thought I did it but I confused it with wattpad lol...

Real life is always more important than fan fiction. Interested to see where this is going. If you really want constructive criticism, I'd suggest spacing your paragraphs apart. It gives anyone's writing a better visual set up and breaks in the flow that I think can be helpful. Keep it up, man!

@smutty pariah

yee thanks :) theres definitely going to be more :)

Interesting. Looking forward to more.

@Black_veiled_dragon

Thank you!!

This is amazing keep it up!