Life's Passing - Comments

So far, one of the better written fanfics I have read. Awesome story line as well.

@BekahJoy

Bekah shut up LMAO!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^u^

This story's amazing, like seriously, I really love leslie and bekah, they're probably the best characters honestly xD

There is a sequel coming guys don't worry ^.^ lol

Fucking hell. Now what happens

Holy shit!

Dude I can totally tell the difference! These chappies are super-sweet!!! Kudos!!!

i hope Andy is alive (or some version thereof) & Leslie is ok! Gah! Stupid Matthew the butthole!

In the story she is 103 so technically she is the pedo. Also Bekah who is a real person simply suggested to me at work at while back that she would like to be in my story so I put her into it. lol I shouldn't say simply it was more of a fan girling, jumping up and down, joyous cry for her to fall in love with CC but altogether the same. lol I have know gotten a laptop finally and am able to update with less typos now. Like I said before I had been using my ex boyfriends but we broke up and he moved out. The only typos now should be from my new kitten who likes to walk all over my keys because she indeed thinks that if it is made of warmth it is for sits

gah! are you shipping bekah and cc, she's a minor, isn't she only 17? even if she's undead or whatever, all the guys are around 30 except andy, who is both taken and ?dead?. no angel is going to commit a felony and bone a teenager, heh-heh. i don't know that maharet would be into a statuatory type situation. on the other hand, this is fanfiction, and everyone on here writes about that sort of thing all the damned time, because they're often underage.

have you tried writing on a notepad thing or word document first, where you can edit your chapter? my very first story, i used to write chapters directly onto the site when i was on some of my rotations for school, and i didn't even have an adblocker, it caused a ton of problems.

Could Andy's spirit still be somewhere? Shucks! Bad, bad Matthew!

@anathema

Tehe! Me and a co worker decided we should be in the fan fiction hahaha.

Possession, eh? Interesting!

Dude you have some balls! I don't think anyone ever kills off Andy! Haha! That's so sad, though, he had the toughest time, holy crap! Fuck that Matthew guy!

I admit the 'flying towards the groin' was an awesome typo. More Ashley than Andy. ;)

shit just got real. Poor Andy.

@leslielanky
Since you said it's toward the end, I wouldn't add a new character at the end unless it's only briefly, or, like, to be killed or something, haha! If it has a plot purpose to carry through to the sequel, you could. Just adding yourself and no one else would be a little odd, as there would be no other fans, and at this point, none of them are even human, and I think half of them would think of you as a food source. It all depends on context- you're an entertaining writer dude, write whatever you want! :0)

@anathema

Right, right. Also would it be weird if I added myself into the story? I mean, I live in this town if I was just walking around the grocery store and saw one of the guys I'd flip shit lmao.

@leslielanky

i guess that all depends on what you want to do with it. i found my story that's working the best is the one that i had the basic story arc in my head before i started. the one that i made a lot up as i went along, i'm sure people can tell, hahaha! my oldest one is ending soon, and i'm excited. i've got too many stories and they're too many to keep track of.

@anathema

yeah, I'm writing it on my phone. Lol

I'm going to update soon. I don't know if I should start ending it yet. There is a sub plot that I have in mind for Juliet, but I also have an idea for a sequel that I'm pretty excited about. The sub plot will help with her character development in the sequel but it could go either way. Look for a new chapter tonight though. I'm going to think about it while I'm at work today.

cool! a suggestion would be to run spell/grammar stuff, though- it can be a little distracting while reading sometimes. do you write on your phone? i had a lot of trouble with that when i would write on my phone, away from my computer especially.

also just for the next chappy (i'm a veterinarian), i know Andy is a vampire, so i have no idea how it would affect him, but i living person suffering significant blood loss would go into hypovolemic shock. if you then got them wet (like in a shower), they would become hypothermic even more rapidly, even if it was warm water, because of the properties of heat dispersion. but if Andy is actually undead at this point (having been shot in the chest), i'm not sure it matters? ;)

poor Jinxx! he's such a sweet guy too!

Soooooooooooooooooooooooooooo goooooooooooooooooooooooooood
cant wait until the next chapter.