that hatered in your eyes - Comments, page 2

I will say that I really like this but based off the first chapter just a couple things that may help you. When you decided to do a new point of view you should put it on the next line. As well as remembering to do it every time someone new speaks. Also, try and break up those big paragraphs, it's easier for your readers to read which means more people who read your story :) I really like it so far though! Onto chapter two!

Needing ideas got writers block!!!

Can't wait for the next chapter :)