the wrenched and divine
Summary
Andy adopts 2 sisters who have a dark past while on worpe tore but will the guys be able to help them in time or is it to late ( this is my first fan fiction so if it need something just please be nice .... Please )
Chapters
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a savior will be there
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waking up
cami's and emi's p.o.v
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we do belong
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knifes and razors
self harm ( Andy POV )
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the truth comes first
andys pov
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breakfast and meetings
andys p.o.v
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meetings
andys pov
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new friends and people... sordof
emily's pov
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tour
camis pov ( two days later )
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sound checks and stalkers
cami's pov
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sing and shopping
sam's pov
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surprize
emily's POV
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home again
Andy's pov
Ok, I don't want to sound horrible or anything but, you need to edit this, proof read everything before publishing is essential. First off, where's the capitalisation on your story title, and chapter titles? That was the first thing that's put me off reading this. Second, spelling, worpe tore? I'm guessing that's supposed to be Warped Tour? Third, names need to be capitalised as well, whic comes under the proof reading.
I'm not wanting to sound horrible, but constructive criticism helps with improving your writing, I find that reading an actual book help with grammar, spelling and formatting your story. I've not read the story as I looked at the state of it and it immediately put me off reading it.
1/31/15