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Together We'll Set The World On Fire

An Angelic Whisper

Harper’s POV
Then he pulled the trigger.
I expected instant death but I felt nothing until wet liquid splattered all over me. I opened my eyes to a horrific sight. Carl had literally blown his brains out instead of mine. He had shot himself in the mouth when I had assumed he was going to shot me…
Why?
Then I realized the red liquid on me was Carl’s blood
I screamed.
Loud shrill and bone chilling. I tried to fling myself out of the bed which was doused in Carl’s blood but I was still hooked up to many machines and couldn’t figure out how to escape.
His brains were literally splattered on the ceiling and walls. He lay in a crumpled heap on the floor with a messy shot through his head bleeding out.
Worst of all he was twitching.
Wasn’t he supposed to die straight away with a wound like that.
“I did it.” He grinned through was must have been excruciating pain. “You lose.”
This made me remember my own attempt at a way out. But I had come to realize that I wasn’t winning by cheating out, I was the one losing.
Losing my fight against those who hated me.
Being weak.
I wanted to tell him that but all I could do was scream for help.
Scream for Ashley.
Scream for Andy.
Scream for the rest of the band.
I heard trampling footsteps, screams, and sirens going off and people were pounding at my door trying to get it open.
“HElP!” I sobbed in terror.
Carl was still alive and breathing and now struggling to get up.
This couldn’t be happening to me.
They finally broke down the door and a doctor tackled Carl to the ground. I shrieked incoherently wanting to literally tear my hair out. I didn’t understand anything that was going on.
Things were ringing.
Lights were flashing.
And pain was everywhere.
It consumed my body as if my heart was trying to leap out of my own chest.
I wanted Ashley.
I craved his save and comforting embrace.
A nurse unhooked me from my machines and dragged me into a wheel chair as I suddenly had no control over my body.
He wheeled me out to the front steps. He helped me out and began to guide me to an ambulance.
I spot Ashley sobbing uncontrollably over a body bag.
I wondered why.
“Ashley!” I cried.
He looked up in confusion.
I called his name again.
He turned and saw me. The dam inside me broke as the tears began to flow and I stumbled towards Ashley. He ran to me sweeping me up in his arms sobbing alongside me I finally got to say the words I’ve wanted to do for so long.
“I l-love you Ashley.” I said as my heart gave one last pounding thump.
My world went dark yet again. “Harper…” An angelic voice whispers. “Harper please wake up. I need you.”
Who? I wondered. But I couldn’t break through the dark barrier that kept me unconscious.
“Harper. Please. We all love you. P-please wake up.”
I wanted to comfort the voice who seemed so lost and broken but I was trapped inside my own mind it seemed.
Where there was only darkness.
“Baby girl. You have to wake up.” A musical voice whispers in my ear followed by. “P-please”
“Harper, we never really got on that well. I was a bit of an asshole to you but I swear if you wake up I will literally kiss you.” There was sobbing in the background of that voice.
“You’ll wake up won’t you Harp? Promise?” a voice says. I wish I could tell them I could hear their pain and soft whispers.
“Harper, I love you.”
There was a sudden sensation was someone soothing stroking my hair.
I suddenly hear my slow heart.
I can smell now too.
“Did her finger just twitch?” I heard an excited voice chirp.
“You’re seeing things.” A pessimistic voice says lowly.
My eyes flutter open.
I look and see a crowd of people in the room.
“What the fuck is g-going on?” I croaked suddenly scared.
“HARPER!” There was a joyous chorus of the name.
I screamed as everyone in the room swarmed me trying to kiss touch and hug me crying weirdly.
“Harper what’s wrong!?” One of them cried. He had startling blue eyes and long black hair. He was hot.
“Who are you?” I demanded.

Notes

>:)
new chapter update!
hope you enjoyed lemme know what you think!

Comments

@dead_on_the_inside
Thank you, i'm actually really glad that you brought that to my attention so again THANK YOU :) and thank you for your concern i hope that i am able to get away from my current situation very soon :) so again THANK YOU :) <3 <3

This is so great. I'm sorry about how you've been feeling lately I hope you feel better soon.

@dead_on_the_inside
Thank you for your input :) I actually really appreciate that you took the time to write that out and actually give me an honest opinion :) Anyway the reason the ending is so abrupt is because there is a sequel so the story is not over in any way shape or form. But anyway thank you for your advice and i definitely will take it under advisement and do my best to put more emotion into my writing!!! Thanks to your suggestion (i don't usually redo chapters but i don't want to disappoint anyone!) i think i'll add some more content to the last chapter and then start on the sequel :) Again thank you so much for your comment and i'm flattered that you think i'm one of the best writers on the site :D And i didn't even notice that my writing has been falling down a little so thank you for bringing that to my attention!
Thanks so much!!!

To be completely honest. I love your story. You are a great writer. But this ending is shit. You could have ended it so much better and still had the same ending if you actually put time into this last chapter. I have loved both of these books so much and honestly you are one of the best writers on this site but this last chapter was lazily written. You have so much potential to write a better chapter and ending. This story deserves a better ending. And I don't mean a happy ending but a better written ending. If you don't want them together than put some actual emotion into the down fall. And I'm sure it's not just me who thinks the quality of this ending could have been better.

b-bu-bu-bu-bu-b-b-b-b-b- WHHHHYYYYYY?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?

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11/28/14