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Together We'll Set The World On Fire

A terrifying sight

~Harper’s POV~
“I want you to know that I’m okay with you too being together.” Andy said as if it physically hurt him.
“Really?” I asked in amazement barely believing my own ears.
“Don’t make me change my mind.” Andy growled playfully. “And I talked to Ashley and he’s sorry. Like agonizingly sorry. I want you to forgive him.”
“Of course.” I said. “I started it after all.”
“Harp you’re a piece of work.” Andy grinned and kissed my cheek. “Come on,”
He held me by the hand and helped me to my feet and then together like brother and sister we took a long walk on the beach.
And we talked.
Talked about our feelings.
And all the bad blood between us.
I told him how angry and upset he had made me with Carolyn. Of course I didn’t tell him I had been in love with him. I told him about my cutting, depression and near rape. It felt so good not only to relieve myself of the burden but to finally be able to make Andy understand.
And he did.
He retaliated and told me about his childhood. The good times and the bad times.
The bullying he faced.
The depression he won over.
The cuts that healed.
The scars that faded.
His supportive parents and his previous crazy girlfriends.
We laughed.
We cried.
We bonded over our similarities.
And now I get to go home to Ashley. My loving boyfriend and best friend.
Could life be any more perfect?
Could I be any more content?
Well, that was short lived.
Andy and I were walking along the edge of the beach with our barefeet just barely in the cool ocean water with our arms around each other. Not in a romantic way but in a sibling relationship.
Two runners were coming up to us.
There was no one else around.
I assumed they would just pass us like normally they would have.
Except they weren’t runners.
They stopped directly in front of us blocking our path.
Me and Andy looked at each in confusion.
The one slammed his fist directly into Andy’s temple.
Knocking him out cold.
I was about to scream his name but the other runner had already tackled me and put a wet burlap bag over my head.
I couldn’t breathe with the bag over my head and I feared I would suffocate. But the bag smelled funny.
Oh my god.
The smell made my eyes roll up.
And the darkness swept in.
~Days Later~
I woke up in a dark room. It smelled terribly familiar.
I got off the bed I was in and found I was dressed in new clothes. Not only that but my hair smelled of fresh dye.
I crept along the floor trying to find the walls. The floor was covered in soft carpet.
I finally reached a wall and then felt along it searching for a light switch.
I finally found one. I thanked god almighty.
I flipped it on and beheld a frightening sight.
My old bedroom.

Notes

Really short chapter but
DUN DUN DUHHHHHH
Hope you enjoy my story!
Please feel free to comment your feedback!
Thank you all!

Comments

@dead_on_the_inside
Thank you, i'm actually really glad that you brought that to my attention so again THANK YOU :) and thank you for your concern i hope that i am able to get away from my current situation very soon :) so again THANK YOU :) <3 <3

This is so great. I'm sorry about how you've been feeling lately I hope you feel better soon.

@dead_on_the_inside
Thank you for your input :) I actually really appreciate that you took the time to write that out and actually give me an honest opinion :) Anyway the reason the ending is so abrupt is because there is a sequel so the story is not over in any way shape or form. But anyway thank you for your advice and i definitely will take it under advisement and do my best to put more emotion into my writing!!! Thanks to your suggestion (i don't usually redo chapters but i don't want to disappoint anyone!) i think i'll add some more content to the last chapter and then start on the sequel :) Again thank you so much for your comment and i'm flattered that you think i'm one of the best writers on the site :D And i didn't even notice that my writing has been falling down a little so thank you for bringing that to my attention!
Thanks so much!!!

To be completely honest. I love your story. You are a great writer. But this ending is shit. You could have ended it so much better and still had the same ending if you actually put time into this last chapter. I have loved both of these books so much and honestly you are one of the best writers on this site but this last chapter was lazily written. You have so much potential to write a better chapter and ending. This story deserves a better ending. And I don't mean a happy ending but a better written ending. If you don't want them together than put some actual emotion into the down fall. And I'm sure it's not just me who thinks the quality of this ending could have been better.

b-bu-bu-bu-bu-b-b-b-b-b- WHHHHYYYYYY?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?

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11/28/14