DayTripper's Fanfic Fails

Space your paragraphs, mate. USE paragraphs. I can't read something that looks like this shit:



“Ew, you’re WHAT?” “Ugh, Oli, chill”, I whined, staring at myself in the mirror. Tonight was that stupid party Ashley wanted to force me to. “I got it, man. Just-” “Why would you agree to this?!” “Because Ashley said he’d fuck with Andy and you know, after the fucker tried pushing me down the stairs by the bio rooms in tenth grade, I kind of don’t want that to happen to Andy.” I sat back in my computer chair, glancing over at my dual-screen set up so I wouldn’t have to look at Oliver on FaceTime. I didn’t blame him for being mad. We were supposed to meet up to watch the Bunny Game after all. “Can I come?” he asked. “Not with you, obviously. I’ll stay on the down low. That way if something goes wrong-” “Nothing’s going to go wrong, Oli”, I groaned.

(And yes, that is mine. Beginning for the next part of Andrew) This shit is just awful. I mean, I know spacing doesn't always take but you can still separate your paragraphs to have SOMETHING that looks like a story. Visuals are just as important as the content.

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