Login with:

Facebook
Twitter
Tumblr
Google
Yahoo
Aol.
Mibba

Your info will not be visible on the site. After logging in for the first time you'll be able to choose your display name.

Homepage › Stories › The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome › Chapter 55

The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome

Miss, are you ok?

*Andy's POV*

The lanky girl turned after I called out, and boy, she was packing a lot of facial metal. It was kind of neat, though.

Uh-oh. Her eyes started bulging and she dropped her keys. She must have recognized me.

Shit! The timing could not have been worse; I wanted to find Gwyn, but I made myself smile. If she was a big fan, I needed to try and earn her loyalty. I wouldn’t be where I was if it weren’t for the fans.

The girl blinked once, then crumpled to the ground.

Fuck! What the hell!?!

I squatted down awkwardly by her, mildly panicking. "Miss, are you ok?"

Notes

Not being able to edit my mistakes drives me a wee bit nuts. But I guess it's still better to have an outlet of some sort.

I had a vivid, half-waking nightmare that Andy Biersack contacted me, told me my story was horrendously, personally offensive, and that he wanted me to delete it. I would be wildly embarrassed if he ever read this. But if he did, I would be horrified if any part of it were offensive or hurtful to him or anyone he or BVB cared about. Gives me the motherfucking creeps just thinking about it.



Comments

*NOTE* The author of this story no longer has access to her account due to site malfunction.
SmuttyPariah SmuttyPariah
4/15/17

Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.

anathema anathema
1/26/17

@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.

anathema anathema
1/26/17
View all comments