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Homepage › Stories › The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome › Chapter 45

The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome

Intel

*Andy’s POV*

I sit in a chair in the hotel, going through messages, brain slightly glazing over. A picture of boobs, a rant about the sanctity of marriage and how dare I let Juliet down? (I chuckled), a bunch more generic supportive ones… and then- it was like I had found the Golden Ticket from Willy Wonka:

‘Dear Mr. Biersack,
I am a fan. I am also Gwyn’s neighbor. She works at All Creatures Great and Small. Her number is (xxx) xxx-xxxx, and her email is gwyns.broken.heart @ gmail . com . Her full name is Gwyn Elizabeth Hageman. She was crying when she got home and my gut tells me that it would be good for you to find her. The phone number of the vet clinic is (xxx) xxx-xxxx, they are open today from 9-12 and closed tomorrow. Good luck.

Best wishes and kindest regards,
Harriet’

Oww, what the fuck!?! It took me a second to realize I had jumped up and hit my head on a light fixture. Who cares, this was it! Fuck! What to do? Umm…I remembered Jake’s message, and grabbed my wallet and tore ass out of the hotel, intent on finding somewhere with flowers.Chocolates too? No, that was too much. Or was it? Should I get, like, a fucking stuffed toy? A card? Fuck, I don’t know, we just met!

I was panicking, I couldn’t think straight. Shit! I sat down on a bench outside and lit a cigarette. Do I call? Email? Show up at her work? Call her work? I looked at the message again. Oh, right-

‘Harriet- Have to go find her now, thank you so much, will talk more later, Andy.’

Notes

Comments

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SmuttyPariah SmuttyPariah
4/15/17

Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.

anathema anathema
1/26/17

@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.

anathema anathema
1/26/17
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