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Homepage › Stories › The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome › Chapter 41

The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome

Dickface

*Shauna’s POV*

OMG! Gwyn had slept with Andy Biersack! OMG! And he was searching for her on Twitter! Holy shit! OMG! I have to call Dave! I frantically dialed…

“Hel-hello? Shaun, it’s fucking 9 am. What?”

“Omigod Dave you know that old lady we met last night well she fucked Andy Biersack and they got in a fight and he’s heartbroken and he’s looking for her and we have to help Dave we have to help!”

“What? What the fuck are you talking about? Gwyn the veterinarian? What?” Omigod Dave was so fucking slow!

“Da-ave!” I made an effort to go slowly, I guess I had woken him up. “Gwyn hooked up with Andy Biersack, you know, the singer?”

“Yeah, I fucking know who Andy Biersack is, Shaun, but that seems highly fucking unlikely, how the fuck would you even know that?” Gahhh!

“Dave, go get your phone. Right now. Go to Andy’s Twitter page. Call me back when you are done.” I hung up. 8 minutes later, my phone rang.

“Hello, dickface.”

“I’m sorry, Shauna, I mean, it’s kind of, uh, odd, you know?”

“Whatever, I’m over it. So, we have to help Andy. Ideas?”

“I don’t have any, Shaun. We don’t know anything about Gwyn, do we?” I thought back to last night…

“Wait- she said that she has a black Toyota Prius. Right?”

“Yeah- and I think she mentioned that she went to Oberlin for college, right Shaun? I guess the only question is how you actually get the info to Andy.”

“I dunno. I guess I’ll just message him. Hopefully he’ll get it. I don’t know if it will help or not, but it’s something .Ok, go back to bed, Dave. Thanks for helping. Kiss-kiss!”

“Um, right, Shaun. Kiss-fucking-kiss.”

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SmuttyPariah SmuttyPariah
4/15/17

Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.

anathema anathema
1/26/17

@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.

anathema anathema
1/26/17
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