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Homepage › Stories › The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome › Chapter 38

The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome

Finding a shot

*Juliet’s POV*

When I got the video from Andy, I was a little surprised. I mean, while I’ve never heard him make a lot of fat jokes, I’ve definitely not seen him show any interest in larger women before. I mean, I know that he still feels the need to reign it in around me in general, but I was pretty sure I knew his ‘type,’ and this girl was not it. It made my heart swell with pride to think that maybe he was growing and learning to look outside of the box he had made for himself. I loved what the girl, Gwyn, said to the asshole in the video, about the guys being real people. And socking him in the nuts was definitely fearless.

What worried me was that Andy was planning to post the picture I sent him on Twitter, and I so I wanted to make it as flattering a picture as possible. But it did still need to show that she was a bigger girl, so they would know her if they saw her on the street… After a while, I found a great shot. She was kind of mad, but that was unavoidable, and it was a pretty kind of mad, and I cropped out her hips, in case she hated her butt (I’m no fool). I sent it off to Andy, feeling pleased with myself. I would have liked to search for her online, but I knew it wouldn’t be right for me to be the one to find her. I crawled back into bed, smiling.

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SmuttyPariah SmuttyPariah
4/15/17

Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.

anathema anathema
1/26/17

@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.

anathema anathema
1/26/17
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