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Homepage › Stories › The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome › Chapter 21

The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome

Condoms & lube

*Gwyn’s POV*

I tore the condom package carefully, pinched the tip, and rolled it down over the biggest dick I had ever seen in person. I mean, on a fucking human, anyway. I wanted Andy, but I knew I was small, and I hadn’t had sex in years. I sure fucking hoped that willpower alone could squeeze him in there.

Andy must have seen the look on my face. He pointed to a small bottle at the edge of the bunk. “Lube if we need it. System Jo, water-based.”

“My favorite!” I just looked at him for a moment, smiling. This guy was awesome, who else knew about my favorite lube?

He raised a sculpted eyebrow, impatient to get down to business. In response, I crawled on top of him and carefully lined us up. I checked with my fingers, a little nervous, and I was soaking wet. Andy was hard as a rock. I looked into his eyes, and he squeezed one of my breasts. I lowered myself down onto him slowly as he pushed up into me, and it was like nothing I’d ever felt.

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SmuttyPariah SmuttyPariah
4/15/17

Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.

anathema anathema
1/26/17

@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.

anathema anathema
1/26/17
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