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The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome

Lay in wait

*Andy's POV*

I stared at the closed bathroom door and soon my pants grew rather tight, almost to the point of being uncomfortable. I just saw Gwyn nude for a second, but she had been so white, she looked really soft. Apparently she shaved or waxed her pussy. I wondered what it felt like, and the pressure in my pants became a little more insistent, finally warranting an adjustment. Ugh. I bit my lip. It had been a while.

I went to the back, and looked down at Gwyn’s clothes. I’d never been a huge panty-sniffer, but I tried it now, curious. Sweet, and a little spicy. Weird. I'd have expected something pretty foul after a fight. I briefly contemplated how to look, ‘suggestive.’ I took off my shirt. Um, yeah, that was about all I could come up with. Hopefully, that would be sufficient. I stuffed her clothes into the pillowcase on my bunk, laid down on it, and waited, an assortment of pick-up lines running through my head. It occurred to me that I hadn't had a chance to shower yet after the show and was still all sweaty and kind of adrenaline-filled. I hoped Gwyn wouldn't mind.

I was out of practice when it came to seduction. If Jules wasn't around, chicks usually gravitated to my dick of their own accord, it was just a matter of directing traffic. Something about this Gwyn, how she obviously thought I was hot but never made any move whatsoever, how she swore like a fucking sailor, said just whatever the fuck she was thinking, even when it was sometimes weird or unexpected... She was really strange, but the kind of strange where I wanted more.

Notes

(warning: copious smut coming)

Comments

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SmuttyPariah SmuttyPariah
4/15/17

Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.

anathema anathema
1/26/17

@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.

anathema anathema
1/26/17