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The story of a lonesome ol'Jerome

Hatching a plan

*Andy’s POV*

I tried to walk away casually, keep it cool. Her eyes were an amazing color, I’d never seen anything like them. Green and yellow and grey. And she smelled really good! Some kind of girly shampoo or something… So many thoughts, this felt really different. And weird. Fuck! Bad idea, bad idea. I know, I know. But Juliet said my heart was too big and that I needed to find someone to share more of it. I’d been looking, but it’d just been a shallow pussy graveyard. I lit a cigarette and thought of that crazy girl laughing contemptuously at that giant dude before smashing into him.

This Gwyn was interesting and I didn’t know why, but she had also just tried to kick the skull in of some guy who was being an asshole. Though it was weirdly courageous to go after someone David and Goliath style, she had clearly been intent on putting that guy in the hospital or worse. He had knocked her over, I should probably check on her hands and make sure they were ok. She sounded clear-headed but I didn’t want her to go yet. Maybe tonight I could stay on the bus.

I brought out my phone and sorted through a bunch of texts. The guys were finishing up the signing, the dickhead from the show had been picked up by a friend. I played the video a roadie had taken that had eventually made its way to me, “Shut the fuck up, motherfucker. These men are real people…” Real people. So that strange girl with the curvy hips, full lips, and who swore like a sailor had been defending us?

And, just like that, I felt my neurons firing up and making half of a little plan, whether it was a good idea or not.

Notes

Comments

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SmuttyPariah SmuttyPariah
4/15/17

Ok, cool. I don't mind plodding plots at all, but as a frustrated English teacher, I can totally understand the grammar and structure stuff.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh, i'm not changing it significantly in that regard. i mean more a stylistic change to make it easier to read: breaking up paragraphs, improving grammar and tense consistency, stuff like that. i've become a much better writer and i want my stuff to reflect that. if you're nervous about the changed, you can check out the newest version on my wattpad account. my user name is anathemadvm, just plain anathema was taken. i'm still likely to further revise the very beginning a little, but nothing is plot related, i like the plot as much as i ever did. i just want it to be easier to read, that's all.

anathema anathema
1/26/17

@anathema
Actually, the beginning of LoJ fits the story perfectly, IMHO. You establish Gywn as a likeable, but clearly flawed character from the door. It's much different from most other fanfic, which want to get to the Bride(s) ASAP.

Merelan Merelan
1/26/17

@Merelan


oh my goodness! i don't think even i have read it that many times, though i could be wrong! i've certainly only read it through once in one sitting! i promise that the edited version is higher quality, but i don't dare tinker with it here until i have the whole thing ready to go. right now i've edited through chapter 50, though i might need to ahve another look at the very beginning, because it's so plodding.

anathema anathema
1/26/17